The Grim Roper: The Miracle Man

I've been listening to songs by Bill Roper, a.k.a. The Grim Roper lately.

In general, there's a lot of rough potential in his songs, though I have a nagging overall feeling that it could be much better.

The Miracle Man (lyrics) describes a mind-controlling wizard's rise to power (or perhaps just a regular wizard - the themes of servitude and unwillingness could also be about coercion). It's disappointingly straightforward for a story that could have so many layers.

A few ideas for a rewrite:

• Unreliable narration: dystopian "positive" spin on the Miracle Man.
• Metaphysics and worldbuilding: What is magic to that world? (A theme Roper explores in Teaching Song) What are the counterpowers to the Miracle Man? What kind of society is he building? (I am not satisfied by the song's conclusion of evil for the lulz.)
• Metaphor and meaning: That's a very personal interpretation, but if I rewrote that story, I'd definitely make it molochian, with organizational servitude rather than plain might-makes-right or mind control.

I hope you enjoy discovering this song!

1. Or more plausibly, if I translate/adapt it to French.